Tuesday, 12 March 2013

Tannah's Descriptive Writing

The biscuit is like jumping out of an aeroplane and diving into the freezing cold water, after just flying off the biscuit. Then it felt like I was walking on water, it was awesome until, rip, the bottom of the biscuit ripped. So I had to stop the driver of the boat to tell him that the biscuit ripped. "Oh no", I said the biscuit is ruined, we can't ride it ever again. "That is not good, we will have to get a new one", they said.

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